The Man Who Laughs
His face contorted, twisted, tortured mask,
As molded fast by those who took him young;
They cut and sliced and wrenched and set to task
Each sinew of his face till loose it hung,
Then tightened all the tidbits
Till twas done.
For how else is a jester left to leer?
Too soon the natural face slips back to naught
But blank and vague expression, sorrow or fear,
And who would laugh at that depressing lot
When his is there for always,
Laughter caught?
So day by day the merry fool he plays,
While deep within a burning as of death
Confounds his mirth and blazing, ardent slays
His last remaining hope, desire for breath.
Man respires, aspires, expires
Desires rest.
And so the weary laugher quits his stage
A player like the feeble candle fraught
With end through metaphor in Macbeths rage
Ignoring now what grins his grin has bought,
He walks to sink on water,
All he sought.















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At this point, I can't really drop in a good critique, but if I cruise by later and see something, I'll let you know.
Otherwise? Creepy but well done poetry. Nice reference towards Victor Hugo -- the irony is that it certainly can be alluded to people in real life, too.
Good job.
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brilliantly disturbing
I felt so weirded out when I read it
and it was brilliant
One thing that i didnt get
"With end through metaphor in Macbeth's rage-"
why so?
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Yay for dark imagery.
The line about Macbeth is tied in to the line above about the candle, and is intended to refer to Macbeth's monologue after the death of his wife in which he talks about the fragility of human life:
Out, out, brief candle!
Life’s but a walking shadow, a poor player,
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage,
And then is heard no more; it is a tale
Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
Signifying nothing. (V. v. 17-28)
Basically, I was trying to say that he was like the candle in Macbeth's metaphor for life and death, but the rhyme scheme made me say it all awkward. Which, I suppose, says something for how much more clarity can be achieved in free verse.
Anyhow, thanks again for the comments!
I GET IT NOW
Thanks for explaining it to me
I've never been able to stick to a rhyme scheme as you may have noticed
Although I've always wanted to try it someday
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