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The Man Who Laughs

His face contorted, twisted, tortured mask,
As molded fast by those who took him young;
They cut and sliced and wrenched and set to task
Each sinew of his face till loose it hung,
Then tightened all the tidbits
Till ‘twas done.

For how else is a jester left to leer?
Too soon the natural face slips back to naught
But blank and vague expression, sorrow or fear,
And who would laugh at that depressing lot
When his is there for always,
Laughter caught?

So day by day the merry fool he plays,
While deep within a burning as of death
Confounds his mirth and blazing, ardent slays
His last remaining hope, desire for breath.
Man respires, aspires, expires…
Desires rest.

And so the weary laugher quits his stage—
A player like the feeble candle fraught
With end through metaphor in Macbeth’s rage—
Ignoring now what grins his grin has bought,
He walks to sink on water,
All he sought.
©2008-2009 *orphicfiddler
:iconorphicfiddler:

Author's Comments

This poem is based off of a novel called the The Man Who Laughs, one the lesser known works of Victor Hugo (author of such classics as The Hunchback of Notre Dame). The story is of a man who was sold at birth to a band of Spaniards who turn children into performers through surgical manipulation of their bodies: those who are to be acrobats, for example, have all their joints broken to enhance flexibility, and those who are to be dwarfs are confined to very tight spaces so that they cannot grow. In the case of the main character - Gwynplaine - the intention is simply to amuse, so his face is modified in such a way that he always looks as though he is laughing, even though he truly despondant. And in the end he drowns himself, hence the line about water.

I wrote this piece for the Poetic Responses contest hosted by :iconlovetodeviate:. Yay for NaPoWriMo!

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:iconuntitledroadway:
Disturbing and very dark, but also incredibly well written. You portray the ugliness and the disparity of this poor smuck's situation all too well, and I personally felt a little uncomfortable reading. That's a good thing.

At this point, I can't really drop in a good critique, but if I cruise by later and see something, I'll let you know.

Otherwise? Creepy but well done poetry. Nice reference towards Victor Hugo -- the irony is that it certainly can be alluded to people in real life, too.

Good job. :)

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:iconkitit21:
That was

brilliantly disturbing

I felt so weirded out when I read it
and it was brilliant

One thing that i didnt get
"With end through metaphor in Macbeth's rage-"
why so?

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:iconneomalith:
I like the flow of the rhymes and such. It does make logical sense to surgically alter people for their professions, does it not?
Yay for dark imagery.
:iconorphicfiddler:
Thank you very much! And I do think it's better to make someone feel uncomfortable reading a poem than to not make them feel anything at all. :D
:iconorphicfiddler:
Thank you! "Brilliant" is very much a word I like to hear, makes me feel all good and stuff. :boogie:

The line about Macbeth is tied in to the line above about the candle, and is intended to refer to Macbeth's monologue after the death of his wife in which he talks about the fragility of human life:
Out, out, brief candle!
Life’s but a walking shadow, a poor player,
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage,
And then is heard no more; it is a tale
Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
Signifying nothing. (V. v. 17-28)
Basically, I was trying to say that he was like the candle in Macbeth's metaphor for life and death, but the rhyme scheme made me say it all awkward. Which, I suppose, says something for how much more clarity can be achieved in free verse.

Anyhow, thanks again for the comments! :D
:iconorphicfiddler:
Wow, thank God you have no intention of being a doctor. He he... You're twisted, but I still loves ya! :smooch::heart:
:iconkitit21:
OH
I GET IT NOW
Thanks for explaining it to me
I've never been able to stick to a rhyme scheme as you may have noticed
Although I've always wanted to try it someday

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Procrastination Makes Perfect
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:iconpaul-cooper:
Wow, really liking this, very disturbing. It reminded me a little of the Joker in Batman at first, I have to admit. =)
:iconorphicfiddler:
Thank you! :hug: I hadn't thought of the Joker parallel, but - wow - that adds a whole new creepiness factor. In the new one, it even looks as if his smile is cut into his face... Ah, how images repeat themselves. Glad you like!

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