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The Lady Of The Lake by *orphicfiddler:iconorphicfiddler:



The Lady Of The Lake

In the flickering dusk of the cold forest’s keep
Midst the leaves and the brush where the river runs deep
A rivulet barren as all the world’s sands
Branches off and expands
In ribands and bands
To a lake wherein which a pale maid lies asleep.

Soft gold is the hair that so limpidly flows
Round in circles that dip and as quickly compose
Into icy-tight locks by the white, leaden tips
Of her fingers and lips
And her slim, girlish hips
Bound in sodden silk swaths of frost-coloured bows.

A garland of blooms—wilted snow in her grasp—
Tries in vain—inch by inch—to withdraw from her clasp
And struggles and strains till on frigid mouth plants
A slight kiss by mischance
And continues entranced
In so forward a fashion she surely ought gasp—

But nothing escapes from those lips—not a sound—
Not the cry of offense that she ought to expound
As only befits a fair maiden subdued
By a blossom imbued
With a lover’s bright food—
Though her lover she left when with flowers she drowned.
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This piece was primarily inspired by Ophelia's death in Hamlet, though with considerable modification; Ophelia, for instance, drowned herself in a stream and not a lake. 'Twas a small matter to change, though, and I also wished to play with the concept of the Lady of the Lake from Arthurian legend - what if (thought I to meself) now what if the Lady were not some magical being after all but a hallucination generated by the image of a dead girl toward the water's bottom? I disencorporated the sword, and this morbid little melding was the result.

(And I suppose I also have to grant some inspirational credit to Waterhouse's beautiful painting of the drowned Ophelia clutching her flowers, Rasputina's song "Dig Ophelia," and the pervasive influence of Tennyson.)

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=tedzerds21:icontedzerds21: May 9, 2008, 8:36:15 PM
That was haunting and sublime, loved it really and the rhyme scheme was so tasteful. Very nice, and I like how you inspired yourself to write this, I loved Hamlet and Ophelia was one of my favourite characters. :heart:
*orphicfiddler:iconorphicfiddler: May 9, 2008, 9:30:22 PM
Thank you! :hug: I do love to experiment with various rhyme schemes, and this was one I hadn't quite tried before. And I'm absurdly fond of Shakespeare in general, though Hamlet is probably my favorite. (I got to do the sword fight scene once, and that was incredibly fun.)

And thank you so much for the :+fav:! :boogie:
=tedzerds21:icontedzerds21: May 9, 2008, 9:41:27 PM
You're welcome! You got to act out the fight scene *envious*, I got to act out some too but it was just a soliloquoy :D. I know I love Shakespeare as well, and Hamlet is definitely my favourite. :D
*LeonieSainteVire:iconLeonieSainteVire: May 9, 2008, 10:13:12 PM
I know she waits below
Only to rise upon command
When she comes for me
She's got my life in her hands...
Lady of the Lake...

::soft chuckle:::Ayn Rand...now Shakespeare, Sir Walter Scott, Tennyson and a bit of Edwin Arlington Robinson!
I swear you have been stealing my books. Tell me that you love Pablo Neruda, and we are truly "soul- sisters"!

You are so accomplished in your imagery! I loved every word!

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*scarletwave:iconscarletwave: May 9, 2008, 10:16:41 PM
Well of course the first thing my mind rushed to as well was the 'Ophelia' feel to it. Then I had to read it a second time to so it could get it's own feel, if that makes sense. It's beautifully written...well done. I wouldn't change a thing. :clap:

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~skirklord:iconskirklord: May 10, 2008, 2:48:01 AM
Very nice. Haunting.

As a side note, have you ever read the Garth Nix story "Under the Lake"? It also takes a new twist on the Arthurian legend. It can be found in his compilation of stories "Across the Wall".

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=Yasny-chan:iconYasny-chan: May 10, 2008, 3:16:41 AM
very nice dear!

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~vindicator123:iconvindicator123: May 10, 2008, 3:34:06 AM
This is truly a wonderful poem! When I started reading this the song "Bring Me To Life" by Evanescence was just starting to play. Not only is the title fitting ;) , it's also a very good song to hear when you read this poem! The intro is wonderful when combined with your texts :D
~IrrevocableFate:iconIrrevocableFate: May 10, 2008, 7:42:41 AM
Lovely! The rhythm is enchanting and the imagery is great!

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*Sakanoue:iconSakanoue: May 10, 2008, 10:01:48 AM
Love. Love. Love! Ophelia is one of my most favourite characters and Arthurian legend is perfect too. Love this composition, great work as always ^_^

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